Last Wednesday,
we got in to the group and discussed and worked together. The group work was to
talk about one strategy that we read before class and summarizing and editing
one group member’s paragraph of their writing project #1. Our group’s strategy
was “Strategy 4: Use Your Sources to Ask Questions, Not Just to Provide Answers.”
We used Google document to complete this task. It was cool because we can type
together at the same time. The strategy 4 was about when you are using a source
to your argument or issue, it can bring up ideas and questions. Also, you
should try using your source to avoid using the source as answers. One more
thing is that you should consider only the source in isolation, you might not
find much to say about it. Sometimes, you may not discover all the questions in
the source. But you should not say that the source is “wrong”. It's just
limited in some ways.
Here is my
group’s revised paragraph:
In “The
Meaning of Mobile Phones for society” the author breaks down social matters
regarding the cell phone and its significance on people. Cell Phones today are
more than just a convenient device they are becoming a symbol of individuality
by being able to contact someone directly this ability allows not only for us
as individuals to be more accessible but the rest of the world as well (Glotz
11). The Cell Phone allows us to be free from traditional means of socializing
so now we can be mobile with no restrictions of time and place smart phones
especially allow us to chat face to face through the web anywhere anytime
(Glotz 13). This quote from Glotz makes
us wonder, “How are cell phones harming the society?” The main thing the
cellphone does is bring down the boundary of space and time people now have
conferences in other countries while never leaving their own town. The Ability
to communicate whenever and wherever gives us the mobility to be free. This
attribute is the reason our mobile world needs cell phones.
We used
Angel’s paragraph from her writing project #1. When we revised this paragraph,
it was kind of hard to apply this strategy because we did not have the source, so
we were not sure what the sources were about. Also, I understood what the
strategy is but I was not sure how to produce a question in this paragraph. We
did not know what to do until the very last minute. So, we talked how to come
up a question, and Angel told us that this article is about how cell phones are
harming the society. Then, Kabao made a question “How are cell phones harming
the society?” and she just put the question. After we finished our group work, Angel
was presenting our group work and Mr. Frank told us to add, “This quote from
Glotz makes us wonder,” this phrase to make more sense. This strategy made
Angel’s paragraph more understandable. It also helps the reader to have an
understanding of what the article was about.
For my
writing project #2, I am not sure what discourse community I am going to write
about. I chose hospital and doctors last time when we learned analysis the
discourse community in class. I was thinking about what I should talk when it
comes to the hospital and doctors, but I could not think of any argument. I
think because I do not know that much about them. However, I will have time to
choose my discourse community and get some ideas and the purpose of my writing
project #2.
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